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Flammy
29-07-2001, 23:58
The pain of life is so very great
AAAAARRRRGH AAAAAAARRGH AAAAAAAAAAARGH *
I sometimes feel that I just cannot cope
EEEEEEAAAAAARGH *
But if I throw myself off the top of a very tall tree..
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE *
Who will look after my pet labrador??

*these bits need to be screamed for maximum effect.
(c) Flammy 2001

It is all about the futility and emptiness of life. I almost cried while I wrote it, it touched me so deeply.

Please, I would appreciate any constructive criticism.

Thankyou, sincerely.

blito
30-07-2001, 07:18
a load of crap, neither poetic nor funny.

Mr_Poo_Poo
06-08-2001, 05:24
Yours is excellent, Blito. The jealousy and anger are conveyed simply, yet with an effectual dry passion.