Fantasy World

[llwyth]

Fantasy world.

There's a perfect place,
in my fantasy world,
where birds sing
and sun shines forever.
Full of beautiful things, such as butterfly wings
and the sweet smell of blue/purple heather.

Where the laughter of children
fills the air
and no one is ever upset.
Where thunder and lightening,
is not even frightening
and rain doesn't get you all wet.

Where rivers of chocolate
run down from the hills
and cookies and icecream are free.
Have all that you want
and pay no bills.
Sure sounds like heaven to me.

Where there are no rules,
no police and no schools,
politicians are all obsolete.
Where kids are allowed
to stay up all night
and make noise and mess when they eat.

This fantasy place
is just in my head
and its probably just as well.
For what to me ,
seems like paradise,
could well be your vision of hell.

by Ven.

[Chun the Unavoidable]

Perhaps. You ever heard Queen's Fairy King? (Their first album, stangely entitled 'Queen.')
Not too shabby, though.

[llwyth]

No I havent heard it, but I'll make a point of looking it up now just to find out why ???

Ven :)

[Chun the Unavoidable]

Sorry, I wrote that in my cups, so to speak. But your poem reminded me of that song:

In the land where horses flew with eagle-wings
And honey bees have lost their stings
They're singing it forever
...
Oh Mother Mercury, look what they've done to me
...

And I can't remember much else. Hope that's cleared it up. If it hasn't, try some of this unction...

[DCLXVI]

If nothing else, that lightning/frightening rhyme was plagiarised from Queen.. good poem though.

[llwyth]

Having never been a big Qeen fan I would'nt know about that.
I would however like to say that I have never deliberatly copied lines from anything.
Just felt I needed to clear that point up.
Plagerism is a very strong word.

[Don_Hammy]

thunderbolts and lightning, very very frightening
mama mia figaro bielzebub let me go etc...

i quite like the poem, nice descriptions but seems a bit shallow, especially compared to some of ur other stuff i've seen. reads a bit like a tweenies song. and the use of 'blue/purple heather' is a bit dodgy.

but thats just me being critical coz its not up to ur usual standard so... :)

[llwyth]

I was just trying to write something a little lighter hearted for a change. Obviously not my thing.
back to the deep and dismal for me then lol

[travis bickle]

:laugh: how can the lightning/frightening thing be plagiarised from queen rofl

anyone with a brain in good working order would A) know that they rhyme and B) associate the two

:P

[llwyth]

Thank you Mr. Bickle :)

Ven.